Yay!! So many people have look at this website! Everyone who has tell others about it!
Last time in whatever we're going to call this story
I went downstairs alone and went straight to the kitchen, nobody was there so I went in and went right to the pantry. There was enough food to feed 10,000 people! When I was about to grab the crackers someone opened the door! It was...
This time on ________....
The cook, Miss.Manzoni! I was so scared so I climbed into the cabinet as quick as a could without the cook seeing me and I started crying again.
I was so scared. I didn't know what was going to happen or of Miss.Manzoni was going to see me. I never had met the cook, and I was expecting her to be mean because she worked for
Mrs.Mordar and Mrs.Mordar is not nice at all like I said before.
Since I was crying so much I put my face into my hands but right when I did that the cabinet opened! Miss.Manzoni was there looking at me and she said "Oh my goodness how did you get here!" and I answered "I'm so sorry please don't tell Mrs.Mordar!" the cook looked at me in a funny way and said "why would I tell her she is not nice at all!" I felt relieved and I said "I am going to sneak back but later can you bring up some crackers or something?" she answered by saying "of coarse" then I snuck back upstairs.
Okay guys! You will hopefully hear more tomorrow! :)
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ReplyDeleteI'm looking, I'm looking. And I'm liking your story.
ReplyDeleteMiss Manzoni sounds like a kind, old soul. Looking forward to hearing more:)
ReplyDeleteI'm glad she was nice and not a meanie! What's going to happen next?
ReplyDeleteI am loving this story as it unfolds. I like the setting and characters very much!
ReplyDeleteI like that you have left the decision about the title of this story to the future... to unfold as it may. I used to have such a hard time with two things -- figuring out a title, and figuring out an ending. I finally came up with two strategies (one for each):
- For the title, I just wait until the whole entire piece is written, then I read through it, looking for a word or two, usually a short phrase, that comes straight from the story and pretty much perfectly captures the essence (theme, meaning, main action, etc.) of the story. This method almost always leads, in one way or another, to a PERFECT title.
- For the ending, I wait until I feel that I have gotten the main message/theme/action/etc out, and then I study the beginning again -- how did I begin the story? Was it a quote? A dream? A hope? Some type of action? Think about it,.... THEN... I think of some way to "REFLECT" that same method (another quote, another dream or the conclusion of the dream, the result of hoping, a similar action or opposite action, etc. -- in other words, I try to "mirror" the beginning in the end. Because I always found it VERY hard to come up with a "clever" ending, so I found that by "mirroring" the beginning of the story, my ending thus seemed (a) clever, (b) a neat way to wrap up, and (c) totally awesome.
I hope this advice helps. I am really looking forward to reading more of your writing on this blog! (And I hope you are better at keeping up with your blog than I have been in the past!!!!)
good job! I love your stories! this is S
ReplyDeleteNice,I totally love it so far!!!!!!!!It is a great blog you have and i can not wait until next time!!!
ReplyDelete~S.R.